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I just finished the novelisation of S7, "Chosen". Oh, boy. It's ambitious to cram 22 episodes into one book. I appreciate that nuances have to go but, really, this is dire.
First, there's a typo on almost every page. Quotation marks left off dialogue, spelling mistakes, tense changes...this was edited by someone with their eyes shut. Unforgivable number of mistakes. If it turned up at Bad Buffy fic, it wouldn't look out of place. Look at this and I've copied it exactly.
"No you get some rest," he ordered her, rising. "I'll check in before first light You can decide how you want -"
'No' should be 'Now' and there's a missing period after 'light'. Trivial? Maybe if it were just the once.
"He hit her back, hard, and she returned the favor with equal forced."
A few lines later,
"She wrenched out his grasp and kicked him in the gut, readying for his returning blow."
Or, "Buffy made of avoiding eye contact with Giles, and he sucked it up."
And there's the clumsy filling in of the script. "Candles glowed, bronzing her with a glow." Do we have a vocab deficiency? Throw in effulgent if you have to!
There's also a distressing tendency to use Buffy speak in the narrator's voice which bugs me.
"Much with the creeping, as Buffy snuck into Principal Wood's office..."
Bottom line? Not impressed. Still teared up when I got to Spike's exit though...
First, there's a typo on almost every page. Quotation marks left off dialogue, spelling mistakes, tense changes...this was edited by someone with their eyes shut. Unforgivable number of mistakes. If it turned up at Bad Buffy fic, it wouldn't look out of place. Look at this and I've copied it exactly.
"No you get some rest," he ordered her, rising. "I'll check in before first light You can decide how you want -"
'No' should be 'Now' and there's a missing period after 'light'. Trivial? Maybe if it were just the once.
"He hit her back, hard, and she returned the favor with equal forced."
A few lines later,
"She wrenched out his grasp and kicked him in the gut, readying for his returning blow."
Or, "Buffy made of avoiding eye contact with Giles, and he sucked it up."
And there's the clumsy filling in of the script. "Candles glowed, bronzing her with a glow." Do we have a vocab deficiency? Throw in effulgent if you have to!
There's also a distressing tendency to use Buffy speak in the narrator's voice which bugs me.
"Much with the creeping, as Buffy snuck into Principal Wood's office..."
Bottom line? Not impressed. Still teared up when I got to Spike's exit though...